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Spaiku.

I was hoping for a visit from the funny Spaiku fairy, but apparently all the downers I've been taking for my back wanted me to write these instead. Oh well. Here's handful of haiku from BtVS S7 episodes "Never Leave Me," "Bring on the Night," and "Showtime."
Pairing: Spike/Buffy.
Rating: PG.


--

I.
Now she knows the worst,
surely she'll do what she must;
end his soul's torment.


II.
Weathers each abuse,
an echo in his dead heart:
she will come for me.


III.
Once more, perverse wit
(I mean, you hated Paris)
is his sole defense.


IV.
She knows: he endured
every insult to his flesh
because she believes.


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clawofcat
Apr. 17th, 2008 01:39 am (UTC)
Oh. Oh oh oh. These are so so beautiful. I've been having an angsty day and these made tears well in my eyes. I like the funny ones, but these have so much heart to them, especially two and four. I applaud you, hon. They touched me deeply. You were able to capture the depth of this emotional time for Spike brilliantly in so few words.
mere_ubu
Apr. 17th, 2008 02:10 am (UTC)
Thank you--that means so much to me. I felt really unsure about these, and your feedback just totally made my evening. I may have to have it bronzed. :)

P.S. I just saw your post and left a comment at your journal. *huge hugs*
missmurchison
Apr. 17th, 2008 01:53 am (UTC)
These are gut-wrenchingly good.
mere_ubu
Apr. 17th, 2008 02:15 am (UTC)
Wow. Thank you so much!
diachrony
Apr. 17th, 2008 02:01 am (UTC)
Very affecting and beautiful. ::sniffle::

(Those are good drugs, then?)
mere_ubu
Apr. 17th, 2008 02:18 am (UTC)
Aw, thank you. I really appreciate your feedback.

Mmmm, flexeril--relaxes brains as well as muscles.

P.S. Hey, you're back! I'm glad to see/read you. :)
beloved_77
Apr. 17th, 2008 02:19 am (UTC)
Love #4.
mere_ubu
Apr. 17th, 2008 02:31 am (UTC)
Thank you!

I just went and read about your James-a-licious weekend, and it looks like you had SO MUCH FUN!! *sulks jealously* Okay, I'm over it. Glad you had such a great time. :D

Edited at 2008-04-17 02:31 am (UTC)
selinde2
Apr. 17th, 2008 03:35 am (UTC)
Loud purring
I have got to work out how to add sound. Anyway, hope this conveys my contentment. The Paris one cracked me up, in an angsty way. Terrific. Hope your back gets better soon. Are you seeing all the help you need? Physio? Masseur? Yoga guru? Pilates? Chiropractor? Acupuncturist? You are much too nice to suffer. We need to send your pain to Glory, where it belongs....
mere_ubu
Apr. 17th, 2008 03:45 am (UTC)
Re: Loud purring
Oh, I'm so glad you liked them. I don't know that I've ever written purr-worthy haiku before.

The beta and I are having a spat: do you think I should add an exclamation point after Paris? I sort of want one but don't want to tamper with the thing if it works for you as is. He is indifferent.

ETA that I added the exclamation point. Please alert me if you think I've made a terrible misstep; I implicitly trust your judgment.

*sigh* If I were still doing yoga and pilates, I probably wouldn't be in this mess! Stupid desk job. But yes, I've been going to the chiropractor a couple of times a week, because I finally decided that the physical therapy was just aggravating it. I have waaay stronger muscle relaxers now and seem to be *knock wood* slowly mending. Thank you for your support and for wishing my pain on a hellgod. You're very cheering. :)

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petzipellepingo
Apr. 17th, 2008 08:32 am (UTC)
She knows: he endured
every insult to his flesh
because she believes.


These are all excellent but the last one really speaks of Season Seven to me. Because IMO that's what drives Spike during those last days in Sunnydale.
mere_ubu
Apr. 17th, 2008 01:43 pm (UTC)
Oh, thank you. I'm so glad that came through. No one's ever believed in Spike before this, have they?

S7 Spike makes me all sniffley. He needs a big hug!
beanbeans
Apr. 17th, 2008 03:40 pm (UTC)
Oh, my goodness! You made me misty eyed with these! They're perfect, powerful enough that I can not only envision each of those scenes, but I can see the expressions on his face. GAH!

Wonderful, exceptional work, mere.
mere_ubu
Apr. 17th, 2008 04:30 pm (UTC)
Wow. *blushes* Thanks so much, beans! Your feedback means a lot to me. I wrestled and tinkered with these and almost abandoned them, so I'm very pleased that they spoke to you. (Moral: listen to the beta.) :D
debris4spike
Apr. 17th, 2008 04:31 pm (UTC)
They are all so Spike - but my favourite is #1 (closely followed by #2!!)
mere_ubu
Apr. 17th, 2008 06:18 pm (UTC)
Thank you for reading! I'm so glad you enjoyed them. :)
herself_nyc
Apr. 17th, 2008 04:33 pm (UTC)
Beautiful.
mere_ubu
Apr. 17th, 2008 06:16 pm (UTC)
Thank you. I'm so pleased that you think so. :)
hello_spikey
Apr. 17th, 2008 07:33 pm (UTC)
aaaw. Lovely. Again, they work great as a set, esp. II and IV.
mere_ubu
Apr. 17th, 2008 08:25 pm (UTC)
Thank you! Glad they worked for you.

I try to do several at a time if at all possible, because I feel kind of doofus-y when I throw one out there all by itself. (Look--I wrote seventeen syllables! Alert the media!) :D
moscow_watcher
Apr. 17th, 2008 10:43 pm (UTC)
Powerful and poignant. Quintessential Spuffy.
mere_ubu
Apr. 17th, 2008 11:30 pm (UTC)
Wow, thank you for the compliment! I'm so glad you liked them.
louise39
Apr. 18th, 2008 02:32 pm (UTC)

These are SO lovely. They bring back all the emotions that season 7 Spike raised...

I am constantly amazed how you can construct a concrete image using these tight parameters. Specially liked #4 and the individual line and wraparound complexity.

hope you are feeling stronger
mere_ubu
Apr. 18th, 2008 03:13 pm (UTC)
Thank you very much! I wasn't sure if these were going to work, so I'm really glad to hear that they spoke to you.

I seem to be slowly improving. *fingers crossed* Hope you have a great weekend.
jamalov29
Apr. 18th, 2008 03:27 pm (UTC)
These are very nice,powerful paintings. My favourite is -4 , there is so much of his loving essence in it.
mere_ubu
Apr. 18th, 2008 03:44 pm (UTC)
Thanks for reading and for the feedback! I'm glad that you enjoyed them.

*points to your icon* That's lovely.
ladyaelfwynn
Apr. 18th, 2008 08:20 pm (UTC)
Yay! More Spaiku! **claps wildly**

I really think you capture the essence of Spike in your haiku.

I like it enough that I featured it in my journal last week for my Saturday Seconds feature for Poetry Month. Everyday, I'm posting a poem and on Saturdays there're extra goodies.

I think tomorrow will showcase our beloved bloody awful poet himself, if I can find the poem he wrote for Cecily.

Anyways, I'm really enjoying your Spaiku! I look forward to reading more!
mere_ubu
Apr. 18th, 2008 10:06 pm (UTC)
*bows clumsily*

Wow! You just made my afternoon. I'm so flattered that you included Spaiku in your post!

I'm really glad to hear that you're enjoying them. I don't always remember to post them at spike_fics, but if you click on the "spaiku" tag in my journal, you might find some you haven't seen.

P.S. My husband pulled the audio for "Ode to Cecily" off of NFA and put it on my ipod. I'd be happy to transcribe it and send it to you when I get home. Just lemme know. :)

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(Anonymous)
May. 4th, 2008 02:39 pm (UTC)
Hi I have a nomination for you at Fang Fetish Awards, alas no email in which to send you the required email. If you could please email me at fangfetish @ gmail.com I would appreciate it!

Athenewolfe
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