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Bless me, LJ, for I have sinned. It has been thirty-six days since my last Spaiku post. Grant me absolution, and I will vow to post a weekly batch henceforth. Onward! Another interlude wherein Spike and Buffy Bicker at the Bronze--this time about vampirism as a profound existential experience--before the continuation of Spike's completely truthful reminiscences to her about the good old days. ;)   BtVS, S5, G. Previous parts here. Thanks to the mister for having Beta Lunch with me.
Mutters, affronted—
traded up on the food chain!
Girl has no idea.

Trade a faded life
for radiant living death?
No contest, Summers.

It’s transmutation:
a revamping, if you will.
S’not about diet.

Smokes, chalks a cue with
infuriating smugness;
eyeballs his next shot.

Persona in place,
picks up the thread of his tale . . .
embroiders the past.

(part 9: appellation)


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Sep. 6th, 2008 10:03 pm (UTC)
Oh, thank you! I'm so glad that you liked these, and earning a "Woo Hoo" makes my day. :D

Hope you're having a great weekend, sweetie!
Sep. 5th, 2008 06:34 pm (UTC)
The third! The third!
Sep. 6th, 2008 10:05 pm (UTC)
Hee! Thank you. I wasn't sure if I could get away with "revamping," but I'm glad that it seems to have worked. :)
Sep. 5th, 2008 06:36 pm (UTC)
Yay! More Spaiku! You know, I got so wrapped up in the William/Dru stuff that I kind of forgot you were doing the whole episode, lol.

"traded up on the food chain!" - it's nice when the lines happen to have the right syllables, isn't it? :)

I think #2 and #5 are my favorites.
Sep. 6th, 2008 10:07 pm (UTC)
Thank you, sweetie. *whispers* Y'know what? I kind of forgot, too! I finished that last William batch, re-watched FFL, and choked when I realized that I still had about three-quarters of the episode left to go. I'm ready to wrassle it again, though.

I love it when lines fit! :D

Sep. 5th, 2008 07:25 pm (UTC)
I love that last one especially!
Sep. 6th, 2008 10:09 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much! :D
Sep. 5th, 2008 07:32 pm (UTC)
Mere's spaiku ! :))*dances*

It's beautifully drawn- my favourite are 4 and 5. I think I've seen that fabulous scene in the Bronze so many times that I've lost count.;-)
Smokes, chalks a cue with
infuriating smugness;
eyeballs his next shot.
Oh the smugness how I loved it !
Perfect visual

Have a nice evening, sweetie. Are you wearing TEH birthday shirt ? :D
Sep. 6th, 2008 10:12 pm (UTC)
Hee! *dances with you* Thank you, sweetie! I'm so pleased that you liked these. It's such a short scene, but there's a lot going on in it.

Hope you're having a lovely Saturday. And yep, I'm wearing The Shirt. ;)
Sep. 5th, 2008 07:41 pm (UTC)
Yay! Spaiku!

I am in love with the last two.
Sep. 6th, 2008 10:17 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I am in love with the fact that you found them "yay"-worthy! I've been getting so weirdly detailed with these that I've taken to joking that, sooner or later, I'd end up writing one just about Spike chalking a pool cue. And here it is!
Sep. 5th, 2008 07:46 pm (UTC)
Persona in place,

Perfect line! You "get" our boy so beautifully every time.
Sep. 6th, 2008 10:20 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much! I really couldn't ask for a better compliment than that, and I'm delighted that you think so. :D
Sep. 5th, 2008 07:48 pm (UTC)
It's so hard to choose; good thing I don't have to! Faded/radiant, thread/embroider, no idea/no contest/not diet. All so balanced and well said. *sniff*
Sep. 6th, 2008 10:24 pm (UTC)
Wow, thank you for the lovely feedback! I'm so glad that you enjoyed them. *sniff* Dangit, don't get me started again, woman. I'm a frail flower! ;)
Sep. 5th, 2008 08:00 pm (UTC)
Trade a faded life
for radiant living death?

Yes, such a Spike notion because he's just so ashamed of being William.
Sep. 6th, 2008 10:27 pm (UTC)
*nods* As much as I privately complain about Spike's portrayal in AtS, I'm so in love his poetry slam moment in NFA when he embraces the William within. What a lovely last private moment for his character.

Thank you for reading, dear!
Sep. 5th, 2008 08:58 pm (UTC)
Yay for more Spaiku!
radiant living death - perfect description of Spike.
Sep. 6th, 2008 10:29 pm (UTC)
Yay for your feedback! Thank you, sweetie. I'm glad that you liked these! :D
Sep. 5th, 2008 09:26 pm (UTC)
AWESOME! He was pretty snarky in that episode-trying to convey to Buffy what she was up against, tempering that with his feelings for her.

Great job!
Sep. 6th, 2008 10:33 pm (UTC)
*nods* I think he's really offended that she doesn't respect what a transformation he underwent when he was vamped. *pets him* Dude, that's no way to impress a Slayer.

Thanks for your awesome feedback, sweetie!
Sep. 5th, 2008 09:29 pm (UTC)
Another FFL Spaiku set - excellent!

It’s transmutation: S’not about diet.
and he embroiders the past.

Gets better and better.
Sep. 6th, 2008 10:35 pm (UTC)
Aw, thank you so much! I'm thrilled that you think so.

Hope you're having a lovely Saturday. :D
Sep. 5th, 2008 10:07 pm (UTC)
**squee** More spaiku!

This is one of your better sets! They're all spot on, especially II, and especially compared with your last group! It's such a juxtaposition. We see William and we see what Drusilla and Angel and his own determination made of his new circumstances.

I also like V. Spike is definitely a persona that he wears mostly as a second skin these days but we see past it at various points to his inner Victorian gentleman poet. I also like the thread and embroidery imagery!

Very nicely done!
Sep. 6th, 2008 10:46 pm (UTC)
Wow, thank you so much! I have to admit that I was a little cowed at the scope of the project when I finished with William and realized that I still had a whole lot of episode left to go. (Before this, I've just written whatever ep happened to pop into my head and ask to be haiku'd, but sitting down and making myself go through one scene by scene is much more of a challenge.) I'm really glad to hear that these worked for you. That slippage between Spike and William makes him so much fun to ponder.
Sep. 5th, 2008 10:50 pm (UTC)
Oooh. These are all great (as usual!) but number 5 really moves me. Nice.

ETA cause I can't type!

Edited at 2008-09-05 10:51 pm (UTC)
Sep. 6th, 2008 10:49 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much! I'm glad to be back in business. :D

Edited at 2008-09-06 10:50 pm (UTC)
Sep. 5th, 2008 11:53 pm (UTC)
These make a marvelous quintent. I think the final one is my favorite. Kudos!
Sep. 6th, 2008 10:56 pm (UTC)
Thank you for reading and for the lovely feedback! I felt a little sheepish about having so many for such a short scene, but I guess that Spike's just a complex dude. ;)
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